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14 December 2005 @ 01:40 am
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1. Please post a sample of your work to this entry.
2. The sample should be between 300-400 words, no more, no less.
3. Accepted or not, please indicate whether or not you would like constructive criticism
4. If declined, please feel free to re-apply after a period no shorter than two weeks to show any improvements in your style.
5. All work must be original and not 'stolen' or 'plagerised'. Such behaviour is not tolerated at this community.
6. Feel free to post a link to where your stories are currently posted.

 
 
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carissima47 on December 16th, 2005 12:28 am (UTC)
Either is fine with us =)
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carissima47 on December 16th, 2005 06:07 pm (UTC)
Y
Overall, it's a yes from me. You didn't indicate if you wanted constructive criticism or not, but I just wanted to point a few things out =)

You should always start a new paragraph when a character is talking: for example when you have Peyton say "Hello?" at the end of the first, rather large, paragraph.

It also seems a little OOC for Peyton to be so apprehensive or shocked at seeing Lucas, when the show has shown us that they're friends, and that Lucas and she spent time together as friends during the summer. It just seemed a little off that she'd talk to him as if he shouldn't be there, when it'd be perfectly natural in the show. Does that make sense?

Other than that, I think you've got a very good writing style. You've got a good grasp of the characters, and you say a lot by saying not much at all.
Tejal: Brooke - deviousmrsotown on December 17th, 2005 12:39 pm (UTC)
Y
It's a yes from me too.

Overall, I liked it and it was nice Peyton-focused piece. Like Cari said, you said a lot without saying much at all and that's a good thing.

You're approved.
eglow23 on April 1st, 2006 11:05 pm (UTC)
I only have one OTH fic (so far). It's posted at ff.net - here's the link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2871597/1/

Constructive criticism is alway welcome :)
carissima47 on April 7th, 2006 09:20 am (UTC)
Y
Well, that was certainly new! I think you write well, and you definitely have a flair for smut. I'm going to say Yes =) Welcome!
Stephanie: [OTH] Not Your Fault - ©dc_svfanwithlovealone on April 7th, 2006 03:23 am (UTC)
Hello, thought i would apply. I have a small sample of my work here for the 300-400 word limit: here and here.

For longer stuff, my fanfic account is here: http://www.fanfiction.net/~henka
Stephaniewithlovealone on April 7th, 2006 03:23 am (UTC)
Oh, constructive criticism is fine with me.
carissima47 on April 7th, 2006 09:25 am (UTC)
Apart from some grammar issues, I think you write well. I like your characterisation. Just remember that whenever you feel a pause in the sentence, that's probably where a comma should go. There are a couple of places that need comma's and you've left it out. Also, it's:

"Let's go home," Haley suggested.

not

"Let's go home." Haley suggested.

Any site you look up on google will have pointers on this and other grammar issues, you might want to skim through one of them =)

If you work on that, I'm going to say yes =)
carissima47 on April 7th, 2006 09:27 am (UTC)
You need to join the community before I can give you posting access =)
klutz_the_kay on April 15th, 2006 08:40 pm (UTC)
I've written several short OTH fics, so I thought I'd apply too. Here's a link to one of my stories:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2803328/1/

Constructive criticism is always welcome!
carissima47 on April 17th, 2006 04:30 pm (UTC)
Y
I'm going to give you access, because I like the way you write, it's unusual and interesting. But just a pointer that I noticed in some of your other stories:

"Let's go home," the boy suggested.

not

"Let's go home." the boy suggested.

Any site you look up on google will have pointers on this and other similar grammar issues, you might want to skim through one of them =)
klutz_the_kay on April 19th, 2006 08:59 pm (UTC)
Re: Y
Thanks for the access and advice! I admit I haven't been writing long compared to some, so contructive criticism is always welcome! :)
Jodo_not_confess on July 9th, 2006 11:42 pm (UTC)
Hey Cari and Tej!
I wanted to finally apply to this community lol...
Ok..here's a sample of my writing:
Tej might be already familiar with it tho. *snickers*

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3033033/1/
(Anonymous) on July 25th, 2006 04:29 pm (UTC)
A definite yes from me. And I know Tej says yes too ;D
stolemyworld on July 25th, 2006 04:30 pm (UTC)
Uh, that was me. Heh.
Jodo_not_confess on July 25th, 2006 09:46 pm (UTC)
Thanks Cari!
Um..do I have posting access as of right now? Cause I don't see anything here. *scratches head*. But that might be just me and my livejournal disability lol.